Showing posts with label editing. Show all posts
Showing posts with label editing. Show all posts

Wednesday, January 16, 2013

Tip & Quote of the Week: "Who, Which & That"

"You keep using that word. I do not think it means what you think it means." 
~ Inigo Montoya, The Princess Bride

I know that many people get "who", "which" and "that" confused while writing.
Here are their definitions:

who
pronoun 
1 [ interrog. pron. ] what or which person or people: 
who is that woman? | I wonder who that letter was from. 
2 [ relative pron. ] used to introduce a clause giving further information 
about a person or people previously mentioned: 
Joan Fontaine plays the mouse who married the playboy. 
• archaic the person that; whoever: who holds the sea, perforce doth hold the land.

which 

interrogative pronoun & adjective

asking for information specifying one or more people or things from a definite set: 
[as pron. ] which are the best varieties of grapes for long keeping? | 
which of the suspects murdered him? | 
[as adj. ] which way is the wind blowing?

which 
relative pronoun & adjective 
used referring to something previously mentioned 
when introducing a clause giving further information: 
[as pron. ] a conference in Vienna, which ended on Friday | 
[after prep. ] it was a crisis for which he was totally unprepared | 
[as adj., after prep. ] your claim ought to succeed, 
in which case the damages will be substantial.

that 
pronoun (pl. those) 
1 used to identify a specific person or thing observed by the speaker: 
that's his wife over there. 
• referring to the more distant of two things near to the speaker 
(the other, if specified, being identified by “this”): this is stronger than that. 
2 referring to a specific thing previously mentioned, known, or understood : 
that's a good idea | what are we going to do about that? 
3 [often with clause ] used in singling out someone or something 
and ascribing a distinctive feature to them: 
it is part of human nature to be attracted to 
that which is aesthetically pleasing | 
his appearance was that of an under-grown man | 
they care about the rights of those less privileged than themselves. 
4 ( pl. that ) [ relative pron. ] used to introduce a defining or restrictive clause, 
esp. one essential to identification 
• instead of “which,” “who,” or “whom”: the book that I've just written. 
• instead of “when” after an expression of time: the year that Anna was born.

that 
adjective (pl. those) 
1 used to identify a specific person or thing observed or heard by the speaker: 
look at that man there | how much are those brushes? 
• referring to the more distant of two things near to the speaker 
(the other, if specified, being identified by “this”). 
2 referring to a specific thing previously mentioned, known, or understood: 
he lived in Mysore at that time | seven people died in that incident. 
3 [usu. with clause ] used in singling out someone or something 
and ascribing a distinctive feature to them: 
I have always envied those people who make their own bread. 
4 referring to a specific person or thing assumed as understood 
or familiar to the person being addressed : 
where is that son of yours? | I let him spend all that money on me | 
Dad got that hunted look.

that 
adverb [as submodifier] 
to such a degree; so: I would not go that far. 
• used with a gesture to indicate size: it was that big, perhaps even bigger. 
• [with negative ] informal very: he wasn't that far away. 

that
conjunction 
1 introducing a subordinate clause expressing a statement or hypothesis: 
she said that she was satisfied | it is possible that we have misunderstood. 
• expressing a reason or cause: he seemed pleased that I wanted to continue. 
• expressing a result: she was so tired that she couldn't think. 
• [usu. with modal ] expressing a purpose, hope, or intention: 
we pray that the coming year may be a year of peace | I eat that I may live. 
2 [usu. with modal ] poetic/literary expressing a wish or regret: 
oh that he could be restored to health.

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Who vs. That vs. Which

Rule 1

Who refers to people. That and which refer to groups or things.

Examples:
Anya is the one who rescued the bird.
Lokua is on the team that won first place.
She belongs to an organization that specializes in saving endangered species.

Rule 2

That introduces essential clauses while which introduces nonessential clauses.

Examples:
I do not trust products that claim "all natural ingredients" because this phrase can mean almost anything.
We would not know which products were being discussed without the that clause.
The product claiming "all natural ingredients," which appeared in the Sunday newspaper, is on sale.

(The product is already identified. Therefore, which begins a nonessential clause.)

NOTE: Essential clauses do not have commas surrounding them while nonessential clauses are surrounded by commas.

Rule 3

If this, that, these, or those has already introduced an essential clause, you may use which to introduce the next clause, whether it is essential or nonessential.

Examples:
That is a decision which you must live with for the rest of your life.
Those ideas, which we've discussed thoroughly enough, do not need to be addressed again.

NOTE: Often, you can streamline your sentence by leaving out which.

Example:
That is a decision which you must live with for the rest of your life.

Better:
That is a decision you must live with for the rest of your life.


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Tuesday, November 27, 2012

Tip and Quote of the Week: Kill the Widows

Killing Widows

If you have any action lines or dialogue lines that result in widows – that is, one word, dangling lines – rewrite it to take up one less line.

For an easy, quick read, this will make a big difference.



“So the writer who breeds more words than he needs,
is making a chore for the reader who reads.”
- Dr. Suess


A former Hollywood Lit Manager, Michael Ferris started ScriptAWish.com as a way to help other writers get their foot in the door and has helped several writers sell their scripts (like Travis Beacham of PACIFIC RIM) and set up projects with producers like Academy Award Winner Arnold Kopelson. The mission of ScriptAWish.com is to help aspiring writers get their scripts into shape and then get their foot in the door. His new venture is a collaboration with several professional screenwriters called StudioGhostwriters.com and is intended to help producers get their movie ideas on paper or their drafts polished for production.

I got this picture here.


Thursday, November 8, 2012

Tip and Quote of the Week: Shorter is Sweeter


Shorter is Sweeter

If any 4 lines of action in a paragraph can be rewritten to only take up 3 lines, do it. If any 3 lines can be 2, do it.

Don’t be precious with your words – a quick read is paramount. Tell us only what we need to know to move the story forward, or enrich our view of the characters – nothing else.

"You use simple brushstrokes in a screenplay for things over which
you would take much greater pains in a novel."
-Richard Russo


A former Hollywood Lit Manager, Michael Ferris started ScriptAWish.com as a way to help other writers get their foot in the door and has helped several writers sell their scripts (like Travis Beacham of PACIFIC RIM) and set up projects with producers like Academy Award Winner Arnold Kopelson. The mission of ScriptAWish.com is to help aspiring writers get their scripts into shape and then get their foot in the door. His new venture is a collaboration with several professional screenwriters called StudioGhostwriters.com and is intended to help producers get their movie ideas on paper or their drafts polished for production.



Monday, September 17, 2012

Tip and Quote of the Week: Cut Out the Boring Parts

Cut Out The Boring Parts

Why do we never see Batman take a leak between fighting crime?

Because great scripts are real life with all the boring parts cut out.

With both your movie and your scenes, always enter late and leave early.

If a scene, a character’s action, or even a line of dialogue doesn’t move the story forward or add depth to a character, it can be cut.


"When I write a screenplay, and when I direct, I always pull lines out."
-Stanley Tucci

Sources: http://www.brainyquote.com/quotes/keywords/screenplay.html#Qt2XAKBwUuITJCDb.99 and http://www.screenplay.com/default.aspx.

A former Hollywood Lit Manager, Michael Ferris started ScriptAWish.com as a way to help other writers get their foot in the door and has helped several writers sell their scripts (like Travis Beacham of PACIFIC RIM) and set up projects with producers like Academy Award Winner Arnold Kopelson. The mission of ScriptAWish.com is to help aspiring writers get their scripts into shape and then get their foot in the door. His new venture is a collaboration with several professional screenwriters called StudioGhostwriters.com and is intended to help producers get their movie ideas on paper or their drafts polished for production.